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Page #12. I apologize, because this page contains some swearings and vulgarity. Though some of them are hidden ^__^
Thanks to ~Zannid for beta-reading almost all of first chapter. But if you'll find any grammatic mistakes anyway, say me. I'll fix them immediately.
Don't forget about hidden content.

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Emh5567 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
In Quint's thought-bubble in the third panel, it says, "You'll regret that words, b****" and it should be "those" instead of "that". And I'm starting to think that Quint and Ivshina might have a cruuuuush on one another? Great page, with a few new characters too!
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Autumn-Sacura Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Hehe, we'll see ^__^ Thank you for help with grammar! Fixed it.
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Haldaraina Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
to what Onyana said instead 'what' or 'which' it should be 'that'
AWESOME everything though!! (animation, story and chapter)
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Haldaraina Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
so Quints thought bubble should say regret 'those' words instead of 'that'
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Autumn-Sacura Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you! Fixed.
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Haldaraina Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012
...sorry for saying this, cuz the bubble is running out of space, but the bubble where Yulie say: "It is not my breast that small, but yours..." it should say : "It's(this will give you a bit more space to add) not my breast that -are- small, but your..."
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Autumn-Sacura Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks! Fixed.
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Onyana Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Grammar error middle panel, far right when Yulie speaks. She says "it is not my breast what small" but she should say "It's not my breasts which are small but your...." Otherwise it's a great page!
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Autumn-Sacura Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
:love: Thank you for help! Fixed.
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Kaytori Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
Man what a prick
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