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Yuzo-05 by ~Autumn-Sacura:iconAutumn-Sacura:

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Submitted: May 19
File Size: 106 KB
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Comments: 12
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Another page. Not so many words, but I still be glad if you help me. ^__^
And I repeat, this is not yaoi comics ^__^
For Russians:
Да, это он, наш герой. Юзо, мой учитель. Возможно сильнейший из Восьми Бессмертных, имевший несчастье стать бессмертным, будучи еще ребенком. Избалованный, эгоистичный, сумасбродный идеалист.
И хотя его манеры оставляют желать лучшего, я, Хигу, сделаю всё, что в моих силах, чтобы его мечты исполнились. Я готов умереть за это.

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*LadyMao:iconLadyMao: May 19, 2008, 3:10:06 AM
It all sounds fine to me, I didn't see anything wrong with the text.
By the way good job! :3

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Banana, banana, banana~na na na!
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OM NOM NOM!
=rincor:iconrincor: May 19, 2008, 3:24:45 AM
Erm... the last sentence sounds a bit strange.
Instead of "I'd died for this." it should be "I'd die for this." methinks.
Great drawing. I especially love his hair :heart:
~JUMP-kaizoku:iconJUMP-kaizoku: May 19, 2008, 4:40:21 AM
Sorry if I'm being nit-picky.

Yes. This is our hero, Yuzo, my teacher. Probably the strongest of the Eight Immortals, but was unhappy to have gained immortality while he was still a child. A spoiled, selfish, and reckless idealist. (OR: Spoiled, selfish, a reckless idealist.)

Yes, his manners are far from perfect. But I, Higu, am (OR: would be) ready to do anything to make his dreams come true. I'd die for this. (This is a bit confusing as the reader isn't exactly sure what "this" is. But it's really up to you whether to change it or not.)

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少年ジャンプの海賊だ！
~tenko72:icontenko72: May 19, 2008, 8:36:44 PM
"...but he was unhappy..." would be better.

I like how this manga is going, so far.

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I am Pokemon #180 Flaaffy in DA's Pokemon Crew!
~Pelamin:iconPelamin: May 20, 2008, 2:59:47 AM
Love the look of this. Text-wise there are a couple of problems (which other people have already pointed out) but the artwork is stunning. :aww:

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Anthony Warlow: "Anywhere you go let me go too. It's over now, the music of the night!"
Me: o).O
Friend: "That... really didn't make sense."
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